Happiness in Slavery by TomofSweden

[H Dean]

Thanks for the detailed review MsUther. You're my new hero now and I'm hard at work making it better. It'll be some time now before I released the sequels because I'm seeing more and more weaknesses in them. Thank you again.

I am certain you saw my own review for your story. I hope it wasn't too muh of a disappointment. Chances are, judging from what I read here, you submitted it a bit prematurely. That is, you didn't seperate yourself from the story for a long enough period before your final edit. Be sure to give yourself time - write another story or chapter and then go back to editing the story. If I didn't do this I doubt my stories would receive marks any higher than a 6, 'cause they really bite until the last few edits.