a sonnet - Deep Hue

[Echoes]

This is one of my very first efforts at a shakespearean sonnet style. I am attracted to sonnets because of the strict construction requirements. I hope you find it not to amateurish.

My love is tinted with a different hue.
Painted from a pallet of darker shades.
Passion more suited for when the light fades.
Desires misunderstood except for a few
who share an uncommon passionate view.
Seeking the emotional equal trades
not tainted with false and empty chirades.
The giving and taking among those who
find their release in each others dark needs.
One who requires control freely given,
the other who gives with no question asked.
To each the other certain things concede
igniting a fire that is lust driven
uncommon emotion at last unmasked.

dare I suggest to perhaps a tiny change to one word and read this to yourself, hearing the subtle change in rythme and flow in this line?
"The giving and taking amongst those who"

You show focus, control of words and rythme, and a passionate imagination...how dare you say I am unequalled...bla