a sonnet - Deep Hue

[Talia]

My love is tinted with a different hue.
Painted from a pallet of darker shades.
Passion more suited for when the light fades.
Desires misunderstood except for a few
who share an uncommon passionate view.
Seeking the emotional equal trades
not tainted with false and empty chirades.
The giving and taking among those who
find their release in each others dark needs.
One who requires control freely given,
the other who gives with no question asked.To each the other certain things concede
igniting a fire that is lust driven
uncommon emotion at last unmasked.

DeSade...I wanted to say, you are an inspiration to the poetry section and hope you will continue to analize the poetry and give your views...

On that note I have a few too....

ok the first of the highlighted red I have a hard time flowing as I read through. I know with Shakespear one had to know the language of the time to grasp the beauty in the poetry. I'm wondering had we heard you resite this would it have flowed better. I am one that firmly beleives poetry isn't just to be read but heard as well.

ok...second of the highlighted red..."asked" kind of threw me off some...for me..it didn't fit quite right....not sure if the "d" is to hard for the end of the sentence but it's off somehow....

third of the red... as moptop pointed out..just doesn't flow with the whole of the poem.

As I said...if you were to read this out loud I'm sure we'd all say..ohhhh THAT'S how that should be sounding....