Happiness in Slavery by TomofSweden

[TomOfSweden]

I think it was fine. I agree with EB that the weight on describing the sub more than the Dom was appropriate for the story content. Since it is written from her persp, I understood that she loves him for how he treats her, who he is, not what he looks like- that that is not important to her.

That's funny because that wasn't my intention to show. I wanted her Master to look like any way the reader wanted to. Not that she didn't think it was important. I wanted the reader to fill in the gaps to make it their ideal couple. I don't see your interpretation as a failing on my part. It's just nice to see someone take my work of art and run with it to make it theirs. I like it.

Tom, you've already mentioned the language issue- it is, to me, clearly not written by a native speaker. Now, that is not a bad thing, but I think some extra proofreading would be in order- and you can feel free to pm me or email me- I love editing and revising technical errors. (although H dean's mentioned i used too many hyphens in my story, which i'm working on, but other than that, i think do pretty ok.) Oh, also, that font was a little hard on my eyes.

I'll take you up on the offer. I've got seven more stories in varying levels of completness. It'll take quite some time before I muster enough courage to release them, but I'll remember your offer.

May I ask, how close to home is this story for you? I know you mentioned the sub being based on your own personal ex's, but it wasn't clear how much.

I'm not a member of a slave-humiliating international organisation, but otherwise it's pretty accurate.

My ex's main fetish was to go to parties just like they had and be fucked and humiliated by as many big dicked men as possible. We did that a lot off-course.

Their home-life is based on another ex, and their sexual acts is based on all my lovers ever. It's my apartment they live in.

Having my slaves wear a piercing jewelry in their pussy as a symbol of the submission I've done with every slave I've ever had. It's a thing.

I've got a dominant and very good friend who has a real fear of pussy. I've always been fascinated by being straight, (which he claims he is) and not liking pussy. I added it to make the story a bit more interesting in spite of it not being my sex-life.

The trip to France is pretty accurate. I had a slave once who was very sensitive and craved structure and order. Breaking it in any way caused massive internal chaos for her, beside having a wide variety of phobias. Even though it was just a weekend it was quite a challenge to actually get to see much of Paris. Getting whiped calmed her down so her ass had many interesting shades in colour by the time we got home.

The woman who likes being beaten savegely is based on a friend who is like that, (but she's not a prostitute). She is also a massive powerlifter. Quite a comanding Norse viking woman in every respect.

I've studied nutrition so food interests me, especially diet food that works. Controlling what my slave eats in order for me to shape her body makes me horny. It's also a thing with me.

I can't make up anything from thin air. I suck at it. If I can't see it in front of me, hear it, smell it and taste it nothing ever comes out. There must be something tangible for me to work with.

I'm sure there's loads I've forgotten to mention.

Thanks for taking your time to review it. I value it very much. Thanks