Satan_Klaws ice breaker

[Mad Lews]

Very nice work SK,
You managed to slide those seven sentences in so smoothly I was looking for the tube of lubricant. My only problem was with the fast paced banter it was sometimes difficult to tell who was talking. A few attributions of he said/she said would help. Not every quote but maybe every third or fourth.
The story line is hot and you let us know exactly how these two mesh together. I like that and hope to see more of that in your writing.
I've read the first two chapters of LOF and sent you an e-mail with comments.
Yours
Mad Lews

BTW substitute camera parts for pc boards and throw in a few more scattered books and notebooks on the floor and you've described my office to a T

[Satan_Klaus]

Well I took my time thinking about what kind of story would be able to 'host' (so to speak) my sentences. I knew very quickly that I would do some kinky housework but the details needed some time. For example only on the day that I got down to write out the story did I realize that the male lead would have to be an engineer. He could be in control and lazy at the same time. It made everything SO much easier. (I didn't like the idea of a lazy sub and an orderly dom, much too simple).

Satan_Klaus

[Nikita]

You had a fun challenge SK and you did a good job with it. The part in the middle where there was a lot of back and forth discussion was effectively written verbal sparring. One comment led to another and all of a sudden, it was a spat. Just great! I could hear it.

Later on you just hinted at her consequences with just the right amount of restraint. You conveyed that these two have been together for awhile and still have that spark for each other.

Thanks for a fun piece to read.

[Satan_Klaus]

Thank you for your kind words, Nikita.

Satan_Klaus

[Mad Lews]

Satan_Klaus,
While I'm still reading LOF you might want to try Project Hope just to keep you up at night
Yours
Mad Lews