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    Enough

    Broken eyes bleed
    with the weight of
    a thousand bitten tongues

    and I’m suffocating
    under your hypocrisy –
    exhausted by double standards
    weary of dances with no end.


    Exposed skin screams
    unsure of sensation –
    safe behind the vacancy

    yet you claw at open wounds
    with subtle smiles and
    misrepresented innuendo.




    The phoenix has collapsed;
    tired of flames.








    Hmm... two second write. And my work seems to be getting repetitious.

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    Hmm...interesting. I'd possibly dump or at least re-work the second bit, it seems a bit cliche. but other than that, really good.
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    Thankyou Friday.. offers you a hug.. i like the second part lets me see how you truly feel in your inner-self.. but that is just my inner thoughts.. i am far fetch from being a perfect writer

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