Thanks Clevernick,

I have, since posting, re-proofed this. Unfortunately, when I finish a story, my first instict is to post it, rather than proof it. I know, premature publication is a common complaint, but mental imagery does not seem to be working.

Yes the plot is obvious and, like all of the best slasher movies, if it weren't for overly trusting "Gee, I wander what that noise was, I will just go outside and investigate," type of central charactors, I feel that many of the situations posted on these sites would not come to fruition.

Anyway, I am torn between a continuation of this story, to it's obviouse conclusion, or another story line with the "Among the Missing" charactors.

Will have a play about with this story for the present. Thanks for the advice, I will attempt to step back from my work before submitting again.

Rubberwolf