first attempt

[Kore]

^^ Good but I didn't mean the rhyme literally. There is an intent to a rhyme that flows the words but many times, the words and expressions can be so completely direct, it's like "sewing the eyelids open".

Now take all of your pieces and thread them together. It's not going to look exactly the same but will tell a great mouthwatering story.

[ksst]

When you lay me down
And sternly whisper harsh words
My wrists pinned, your hand

Hard up against me,
Ecstasy, scattered, undone,
Lost but held by you.

Kneeling, naked,
Tightly held,
Head arched back,
Face upturned.

Eternity is between the blows.

Afterward I come down on
Trembling, shaking legs,
My heart fluttering, pounding,
Alone again.

Still the marks prick me
I feel your touch on me there,
Thrashing and beating,

How you made me beg
In desperate pleasure used,
My deep need fulfilled.