Rhabbi's first tough assignment

[Mad Lews]

As the truly observant will note I've moved these posts from the ice breaker thread.
This is starting to look like work.

[Rhabbi]

Rhabbi
The most painful part of writing is taking some brilliant bit of allegory or worse yet cleaver dialog and slashing it away because it really is superfluous to the telling of the tale. I know we readers would marvel at your brilliance if you were to leave it in but does it really advance the story? Don't try to cram, figure out what the story needs to say then slice judiciously.
yours
Mad

Rhabbi
Let me know when you're down to 1900 words and I'll make you an offer. Free and clear title on your soul for an extra 200 words maybe?
Lews

I am stuck right now between 2 scenes that can take the story different was. After that i can trim a bit off, just have to leave it alone for a bit, so I do not think I will need a measly 200 words to get it to work.

As the truly observant will note I've moved these posts from the ice breaker thread.
Ths is starting to look like work.

yes, i did notice that, I was beginning to wonder what the new students were going to think of all this ranting in the icebreaker thread.

BTW, thanks for the compliment on my comments about the gladgirl story. Made me warm and fuzzy inside, a feeling I know you will work to never let me feel again.